My plans for revising my paper include adding more detail to paragraphs of my paper and having less filler. To go along with this I plan on trying to make my paper flow a bit better so the reader can follow my train of though rather than jumping around. I also don't want to give all of it away, some people will want to re-watch the movie again after they read by paper and I don't want to just summarize the first few minutes of the movie. I want to create an opinion and then move on.
I feel like I have used the word because too much. Yes it is used to help prove your point but you don't have to use it all the time which is why I want to work on the flow of my paper and take some of those out. As of now I feel my paper is pretty well organized but I may change it depending on how my editing goes. Overall I am happy with my draft but it needs some work before its ready to be a final draft.
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